This is some of my awesome Writing! My learning intention was to paint a picture in the readers mind "Show not tell When I grow up…
I love Netball. I have only played netball for a year, but I already know that I could make a great career out of it. When I grow up I want to be a famous silver fern. I couldn’t imagine anything better than grow up into an Irene Vandyke, and be in the enormous stadium and have your biggest screaming fans as excited as you are screaming, “Go Shannon go, go, go!” Then have everyone beg like a hungry dog for your autograph at end.
Once I watch the little box houses of New Zealand quickly fade away, I realize how exciting it is entering a whole new country overseas. My pounding heart punches me nervously. The arms of a plane seat enclose around me comfortably. I have been overseas once, to Australia, and I knew when I arrived there that I wanted to go overseas many more times again. I couldn’t keep away from the amusing theme parks, the everyday shopping, and it was even great seeing the fascinating animals in the zoo that I visited.
I think living in a brick, two story house in the peaceful country, with a huge front lawn, an in ground swimming pool would be awesome! Inside it would have a beautiful bedroom, with an excellent en-suite, and a walk in wardrobe, waiting for a whole lot of new clothes! There would be a huge lounge filled with a 3d flat screen TV, comfy lazy boy sofas entertaining all of my family and friends! Having a slice of my childhood memories which is the farm would make me happy. A few cows and sheep in a paddock would be great.
When I grow up with a lives career ahead of me, my life will be set!
This is some of my awesome Writing! My learning intention was to paint a picture in the readers mind "Show not tell
When I grow up…
I love Netball. I have only played netball for a year, but I already know that I could make a great career out of it. When I grow up I want to be a famous silver fern. I couldn’t imagine anything better than grow up into an Irene Vandyke, and be in the enormous stadium and have your biggest screaming fans as excited as you are screaming, “Go Shannon go, go, go!” Then have everyone beg like a hungry dog for your autograph at end.
Once I watch the little box houses of New Zealand quickly fade away, I realize how exciting it is entering a whole new country overseas. My pounding heart punches me nervously. The arms of a plane seat enclose around me comfortably. I have been overseas once, to Australia, and I knew when I arrived there that I wanted to go overseas many more times again. I couldn’t keep away from the amusing theme parks, the everyday shopping, and it was even great seeing the fascinating animals in the zoo that I visited.
I think living in a brick, two story house in the peaceful country, with a huge front lawn, an in ground swimming pool would be awesome! Inside it would have a beautiful bedroom, with an excellent en-suite, and a walk in wardrobe, waiting for a whole lot of new clothes! There would be a huge lounge filled with a 3d flat screen TV, comfy lazy boy sofas entertaining all of my family and friends! Having a slice of my childhood memories which is the farm would make me happy. A few cows and sheep in a paddock would be great.
When I grow up with a lives career ahead of me, my life will be set!